Heart-Shaped Necklace

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Hi, AttnAttack

The length of your poem, if not for the small bouts of rhyme, reminded me of a romantic informal essay.
I think I would like to see it written more as a series, or broken down into a few smaller poems,
chronologically, each indicating this, but that's just me. I really like the last stanza so I will critique
that one in particular:

I climbed over the railing but I couldn’t take the leap                            -eliminate over
My heart was pounding, but my body was weak                                  -and instead of but
And so I did the only thing that would rid me of you                             -no And
I took that heart shaped necklace and threw threw threw.                    -really quirky, clever & cute.


You have a fine prose to work with.
I hope the new day finds joy and peace
for you!