05-02-2017, 12:42 PM
Hi! First of all, thank you for providing feedback on my poem I appreciate it!
Okay so, I really like how vague the poem is. It provides the reader with space to interpret however they might want to. For me, the obvious theme was love going badly. I like how you can sort of see the relationship get worse and worse until it is vacant. I also like how you avoided saying "I love you" and rather, again, provided the reader with space to make the connections on their own. That being said, maybe use better spacing? Towards the end, it gets a bit hard to tell where thoughts end and new ones begin but besides that good job!
Okay so, I really like how vague the poem is. It provides the reader with space to interpret however they might want to. For me, the obvious theme was love going badly. I like how you can sort of see the relationship get worse and worse until it is vacant. I also like how you avoided saying "I love you" and rather, again, provided the reader with space to make the connections on their own. That being said, maybe use better spacing? Towards the end, it gets a bit hard to tell where thoughts end and new ones begin but besides that good job!