04-30-2017, 02:06 PM
Hey tectak,
The info about the parachuting does answer most of my questions. My only suggestion would be to make the fact that the fall is from a parachute jump a bit more apparent in the beginning of the poem. I've never gone parachuting (and probably never will because I have no sense of adventure), so it was actually new information for me that they use red and green lights for that purpose. I look forward to seeing what you do with this poem moving forward.
Cheers,
Richard
The info about the parachuting does answer most of my questions. My only suggestion would be to make the fact that the fall is from a parachute jump a bit more apparent in the beginning of the poem. I've never gone parachuting (and probably never will because I have no sense of adventure), so it was actually new information for me that they use red and green lights for that purpose. I look forward to seeing what you do with this poem moving forward.
Cheers,
Richard