04-30-2017, 01:53 PM
Hey dukealien,
Thanks for the feedback. You got a very point about the way I use simile in the last stanza. I actually edited the first stanza, and before that edit, it was more of a simile than it is now. As for the title, I think it could go in a couple of directions: The narrator could be lonely because he lacks empathy, or he's lonely because he's feeling empathy, but no one around him is feeling it.
Thanks again,
Richard
Thanks for the feedback. You got a very point about the way I use simile in the last stanza. I actually edited the first stanza, and before that edit, it was more of a simile than it is now. As for the title, I think it could go in a couple of directions: The narrator could be lonely because he lacks empathy, or he's lonely because he's feeling empathy, but no one around him is feeling it.
Thanks again,
Richard