First Edit: Why We Fight/Aging

First Edit: Why We Fight/Aging

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04-26-2017, 12:25 PM

Hey Achebe,
Thanks for the feedback. I am actually in the middle of revising this, but am stuck on the couplet at the end... Most seem to agree that it needs to be replaced with something better, yet I keep coming up blank or with lines that are actually worse than what is currently there.

Thanks again,
Richard

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First Edit: Why We Fight/Aging - by Richard - 04-24-2017, 04:01 AM

RE: Why We Fight - by ellajam - 04-24-2017, 07:23 AM

RE: Why We Fight - by Richard - 04-24-2017, 07:51 AM

RE: Why We Fight - by dukealien - 04-24-2017, 08:31 AM

RE: Why We Fight - by headybeach - 04-24-2017, 10:38 AM

RE: Why We Fight - by Richard - 04-24-2017, 11:38 AM

RE: Why We Fight - by tectak - 04-24-2017, 10:29 PM

RE: Why We Fight - by nibbed - 04-25-2017, 02:22 AM

RE: Why We Fight - by Richard - 04-25-2017, 11:31 AM

RE: Why We Fight - by Achebe - 04-25-2017, 02:19 PM

RE: Why We Fight - by Richard - 04-26-2017, 12:25 PM

RE: First Edit: Why We Fight/Aging - by dukealien - 04-28-2017, 10:52 PM

RE: First Edit: Why We Fight/Aging - by Richard - 04-29-2017, 07:15 AM

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