First Edit: Why We Fight/Aging

[headybeach]

Why We Fight

The easy way is dying first before
you tell your only love to come to bed
because to see her fade was worse than war,
the final battle words you left unsaid. For me, these two lines seem a little disconnected. Although, I might just not be following it correctly. What's the relation between these two lines?

There isn't glory in becoming old
instead there's pity from the callow ones Maybe a comma after instead, as well, in order to shift the accent to "pity"?
who smirk at every story you have told,
too young to see you've handed them your guns.

You want to warn about the wasted days
of how they'll never love a better friend
the minutes marching pass so many ways
and dying after her the cruelest end. Maybe a comma before "after her" to keep the "dying" as the main action and "after her" as describing the dying. And maybe a colon or hyphen before "the cruelest end"

But all you'll do is sneer and ponder why
you fought so hard to only watch her die. I really love the way that this stanza sends off the message of this poem!

I really like this poem, I think it really insightfully addresses such a huge topic. I agree tho that the title could be changed maybe, since the question isnt really answered in the poem. Also, I think the word "fight" in the title threw me for a bit of a loop since I was thinking "fight" as in arguing haha and I think that might be why I got confused on those two last lines of the first stanza. Thank you for sharing this! I really liked it!