Rhyme on a Short Skirt on Dancefloor

[18sawe]

Hi rollingbrianjones,
I like your poem - it's got a great plot twist at the end, but it's the rhythm in the poem that I think needs a bit of work. 

Rhyme on a Short Skirt on a Dancefloor
 
There are some things I’d take, In this line I think you should have more syllables, for example There are some things I'd like to take, which then makes the poem flow better.
Yet far more things I won’t;
There are some things I want
Yet far more things I don’t. The repetition and rhyme here is good!!
Oh, but cert’nly my dear, I will promise you this;
Your dainty derriere I would passionately kiss, Lovely language!
And your hair, soft as silk, I would gently caress
With your shoulders I’d wrestle, releasing your stress. Wrestle is a bit of an awkward adjective to use here, the connotations are more physical, where I gather you mean massaging, so replacing wrestle with something like rub, or massage, and then extend the "I'd" into "I would" to let the poem have a natural flow.
Now, your legs I would stroke from the hip to the toe
And I’d take your left hand; trace your palm gently, slow. 
But your heart and your mind
I think I’d leave behind.
Yes, you’re fairly nice looking, but stupid. This ending is amusing, but it's a little bit awkward compared to the structure of the rest of the poem. Perhaps rewriting the last three lines into a couplet with more syllables than what you have here would make it a little less disjointed. Fairly nice looking sort of contradicts the rest of your poem as well, so maybe a more fitting phrase could be used. Using stupid is a great adjective, it ends the poem well, and is abrupt which I think suits the poem to a tee. 
This is a great poem - keep up the awesome work!