I am...

[tectak]

Hi tectak. I was intrigued by this poem because for me it reflects the nature of man, or what most of mankind believes. I thought it strange that each line started out with I am, for these two reasons:
1. I am is the name God gives Himself in the Old Testament (and you left out the Jew).
2. I am is similar to iamb or iambus, and in itself, fits.

I don't necessarily agree with the poem, and even though I am sure it wasn't meant to, as a born-again believer L6 rings very true to me.  I find the poem as a whole an incredible voice of many lost people, and so, a tragic piece. I agree that it could be sent back to work. There is too much missing and may require more research.

Best wishes ever to you!

Hi nibb....if I can begin at the end, you are more right than wrong...a good deal is missing. Jews, Jains, Pagan, Buddhist etc, etc. ...but that's the nub of it. You see, the point is made in one line...just pick on any religion and the same applies to all. I was lazy...my choice...I went for easy rhyme. I don't really need more research at my age...I guess I made up my mind about a lot of things years ago. This then is a distillation...not of deep knowledge but of contented opinion It makes poetry a whole lot easier.
Best,
tectak