No seagull feel

[Richard]

Hey Paul,
I've had a look at your website and some of your other poems, and I definitely think you have a unique voice when it comes to expressing your thoughts. This poem here has some nice wording in it. My main suggestion would have to do with your overall meaning.  I'll go into more detail below:

The sailing of a bare Seagull Sea -Is "Seagull Sea" a place? Why is it capitalized?
on field and path, on road and roof 
heard radio sound effects man giving birds two deaths -I like this line, and I think it is the strongest line in the entire poem. It creates a wonderful image in my mind.
all my eye-catching gone Go-Birds -Is "Go-Birds" alluding to something?
sick smell the sick
investigate the Burke and Hare rooms -I googled this. Is this a reference to murder?
guilt formation in the new times
opened cognac in olden times before all this Heaven - I like the way these last two lines sound, yet I find the meaning unclear.

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I find I've read this poem over and over, and still didn't understand what you were trying to say in some lines. Poetry is a difficult balance because you don't want your poems to be too obvious and blunt, but at the same time, if they are too cryptic, then you risk alienating the reader. I know this is a balance I often struggle with in my own writing. I look forward to reading more of our poetry.

Cheers,
Richard