spring haiku, quantity 6, date: 2017-04-07

[burrealist]

Hey, so I read this as one extensive poem. Mid-critique, I realized it may be several short ones in one post. Anywho, I'll just keep going on as I was.

                here come the azaleas - Azaleas again!
                wait! Nice break here. This would be the "cutting word", right? It's ecstatic.
                where's my wife? 
               
               
                the cat has found a new bed -
                for her The natural pause here is great, too. Typically I'd critique grammar, but this is short-form inspired by haiku... I don't know if grammar is really important. My thought was a comma after "her".
                spring comes once a week
               
               
                cherry blossoms - Here, I'm confused. Is this a philosophical statement? Cherry blossoms do not have eyes, so they cannot read. Or are you trying to tell the reader not to read haiku?
                don't read haiku
               
               
                new leaves - Kind of feels like an omage... Azaleas were new again, but now the "new" has left.
                i'm standing on your ancestors Hmm, okay. You asked for your wife earlier. (This is where my epiphany occurred. The subject seems to have changed so much by now. I'm still going to critique as an entire piece.)
               
               
                beware sprouts -
                here come the cats Cats conquer all.
               
               
                on my kitchen window -
                tree frogs I like this last part. Frogs are well-suited subjects of haiku (or short poems).

My favorite was the second. Cats are lazy, always vacationing... Great image.