03-30-2017, 07:14 AM
Burrealist: Thank you! I appreciate the comments. I'll review them as I consider what changes I might make in the next revision.
Leanne: Thank you! Let me address one specific issue you raise. I knew when I wrote the root line I was brushing up against cliche. I also knew that I wanted to tie it back to the forest path line. I couldn't come up with anything I liked better so left it there at least so you all could see where I was going with it. It's a good call out on your part. I'll come up with some alternative.
Appreciate the feedback,
Todd
Leanne: Thank you! Let me address one specific issue you raise. I knew when I wrote the root line I was brushing up against cliche. I also knew that I wanted to tie it back to the forest path line. I couldn't come up with anything I liked better so left it there at least so you all could see where I was going with it. It's a good call out on your part. I'll come up with some alternative.
Appreciate the feedback,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson