Engaged

[Todd]

Hi Elizazile, welcome to the site! A few comments below on your poem.

This is a good, short piece. You mostly have one dynamite payoff line at the end and everything else brings you there. Given that, I would consider tightening it even more. I think the trick is to get your reader to the end as soon as possible as this is your sole imagery and where the poem pops.

I just want to be able to say
I let this world seize me
And that I reached out and--Your line breaks aren't particularly strong but you mostly end your lines well enough--here is an exception. I think ending on and here is weak.
Seized it too.
Not the day,
Not the moment,
I just want to be able to say--I think this poem can't tolerate the excess of this repetition. I would consider cutting it and leading the next line with something like "but whatever the timeline"
That whatever the timeline,
No matter the outcomes:
Me and this world
Had our sweaty hands all over each other.--Brilliant ending line

I hope the comments help some. I enjoyed the read.

Best,

Todd