< Denver Airport at 8 am >
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(03-25-2017, 05:46 PM)rayheinrich Wrote:  

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                                                                < Denver Airport at 8 am >

                                                                the Rocky Mountains turn to -- weak break
                                                                roars and runways
                                                                taxis, cars, and buses
                                                                concrete parking echoes -- love
                                                                of departures and arrivals
                                                                luggage
                                                                brown and black
                                                                is going somewhere -- 'is' trips me up every time. I keep wanting to read "are." Is there any way you can take out the 'is' and put in something else? It's because 'brown and black' is plural, and so the singular sounds strange after that. Maybe it's just me. 
                                                                with a man whose sign is saying "Jackson" -- good detail
                                                                jeans and suits and open sandals, cowboy boots
                                                                and bathrooms filled with soap and toilet tissue
                                                                as we comb our hair
                                                                clean socks
                                                                nice shirt -- 'nice' is weak
                                                                fresh underwear -- ah, the feel of these things after a long journey Smile
                                                                and cops and terrorists and me -- my favorite line of the whole thing. I never think so much about terrorism as when I fly.
                                                                at tiny tables
                                                                drink expensive coffee -- love this detail, and it's so true. Tiny, expensive coffee. Dodgy
                                                                sitting -- meh. I've inferred this from the 'tables.'
                                                                waiting
                                                                here in Denver

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    Criticism is sincerely to be hoped for. (Off or On-topic remarks and clever abuse are appreciated as well.)

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I friggin love this Ray. Big Grin How dare you be so talented?  Huh How dare you. Dodgy
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Messages In This Thread
< Denver Airport at 8 am > - by rayheinrich - 03-25-2017, 05:46 PM
RE: < Denver Airport at 8 am > - by Lizzie - 03-26-2017, 05:12 AM
RE: < Denver Airport at 8 am > - by burrealist - 03-28-2017, 03:26 AM
RE: < Denver Airport at 8 am > - by rayheinrich - 03-29-2017, 06:46 PM
RE: < Denver Airport at 8 am > - by amaril - 03-30-2017, 03:22 AM
RE: < Denver Airport at 8 am > - by Achebe - 03-30-2017, 06:40 AM
RE: < Denver Airport at 8 am > - by burrealist - 03-30-2017, 06:52 AM
RE: < Denver Airport at 8 am > - by RiverNotch - 03-30-2017, 09:38 PM



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