03-26-2017, 05:12 AM
(03-25-2017, 05:46 PM)rayheinrich Wrote:I friggin love this Ray.
< Denver Airport at 8 am >
the Rocky Mountains turn to -- weak break
roars and runways
taxis, cars, and buses
concrete parking echoes -- love
of departures and arrivals
luggage
brown and black
is going somewhere -- 'is' trips me up every time. I keep wanting to read "are." Is there any way you can take out the 'is' and put in something else? It's because 'brown and black' is plural, and so the singular sounds strange after that. Maybe it's just me.
with a man whose sign is saying "Jackson" -- good detail
jeans and suits and open sandals, cowboy boots
and bathrooms filled with soap and toilet tissue
as we comb our hair
clean socks
nice shirt -- 'nice' is weak
fresh underwear -- ah, the feel of these things after a long journey![]()
and cops and terrorists and me -- my favorite line of the whole thing. I never think so much about terrorism as when I fly.
at tiny tables
drink expensive coffee -- love this detail, and it's so true. Tiny, expensive coffee.![]()
sitting -- meh. I've inferred this from the 'tables.'
waiting
here in Denver
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How dare you be so talented?
How dare you.


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