03-17-2017, 04:14 AM
Hi Crundalism. For me, this is your poem:
I heard a little bird crying
so loud it filled the whole earth.
When it stopped I tossed and turned.
It seemed absurd, no one else had stirred.
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The rest does not work for me, but this bit ^ is profound and emotional. It'll stand so much taller on its own.
That be my advice.
Cheers,
Lizzie
I heard a little bird crying
so loud it filled the whole earth.
When it stopped I tossed and turned.
It seemed absurd, no one else had stirred.
-----
The rest does not work for me, but this bit ^ is profound and emotional. It'll stand so much taller on its own.
That be my advice.
Cheers,
Lizzie