03-14-2017, 12:40 PM
the owner’s manual says
change the oil every five thousand miles
high octane, unleaded fuel only
tire reads thirty-two pounds of pressure ----this may need rewording is this telling the actual read?
check the treads every time you drive ----this line surprised me
doesn’t care anything about -----I like how you personified the manual
leaky trunks
rainwater
my neglect
rusting
jack and iron ----gives clear indication the need of a tow truck
each word should also be plural, though, as trunk(s)
tire blew out on the interstate
tow trucks don’t come at three AM
the owner’s manual says a great many things
about preventive care and routine maintenance
but it will not say
how to love your car -----cute & clever
Hi AttnAttack,
I don't know if it was intentional, but I had a feeling the narrator was inebriated. I like the indications of lost love, especially using high octane, as my mind raced to a flashy sports car, or something once special, now old and in need of repair, but maintaining it is wearing the narrator down, though the cadence of intoxication indicates perhaps it wasn't maintained properly or neglected? Did the narrator grab the wrong manual, surely the iron and jack should have been there...made for an interesting read. I understood where you were going with the title, too, but maybe change it to help the poem's struggle to achieve the recognition it deserves? Thank you for the read. It actually blessed me and reminded me of something I must do regarding safety. I hope you are well. Best wishes to you!
change the oil every five thousand miles
high octane, unleaded fuel only
tire reads thirty-two pounds of pressure ----this may need rewording is this telling the actual read?
check the treads every time you drive ----this line surprised me
doesn’t care anything about -----I like how you personified the manual
leaky trunks
rainwater
my neglect
rusting
jack and iron ----gives clear indication the need of a tow truck
each word should also be plural, though, as trunk(s)
tire blew out on the interstate
tow trucks don’t come at three AM
the owner’s manual says a great many things
about preventive care and routine maintenance
but it will not say
how to love your car -----cute & clever
Hi AttnAttack,
I don't know if it was intentional, but I had a feeling the narrator was inebriated. I like the indications of lost love, especially using high octane, as my mind raced to a flashy sports car, or something once special, now old and in need of repair, but maintaining it is wearing the narrator down, though the cadence of intoxication indicates perhaps it wasn't maintained properly or neglected? Did the narrator grab the wrong manual, surely the iron and jack should have been there...made for an interesting read. I understood where you were going with the title, too, but maybe change it to help the poem's struggle to achieve the recognition it deserves? Thank you for the read. It actually blessed me and reminded me of something I must do regarding safety. I hope you are well. Best wishes to you!
there's always a better reason to love