Among the Ladies (Senryu)
#10
i think you need to somehow create a pause and go off on a tanget in order to creat a cut

heavy rains fall
waters wash away horse shit
dead roses.

split the three lines into two or three parts,

grans dead mums dead
no dinner for granddad
he,s dead too
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Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by dukealien - 03-08-2017, 11:26 PM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by ellajam - 03-08-2017, 11:32 PM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by dukealien - 03-08-2017, 11:36 PM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by ellajam - 03-09-2017, 12:00 AM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by Lizzie - 03-09-2017, 12:37 AM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by dukealien - 03-09-2017, 11:03 PM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by RiverNotch - 03-10-2017, 10:24 AM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by nibbed - 03-11-2017, 10:52 AM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by just mercedes - 03-11-2017, 12:06 PM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by billy - 03-11-2017, 05:05 PM
RE: Among the Ladies (Senryu) - by dukealien - 03-12-2017, 07:03 AM



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