Thud.
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Thank you to both of you for your feedback! I will almost definitely drop the capitals and punctuation when I revise this, although I am reluctant to remove the words that you suggested (mostly "now", although I can see ways to rewrite the last line without "of thuds") due to wanting to preserve the meter.

And of course, the more Francis Bacon stimulates our thoughts the better. Tongue
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Thud. - by Flos Campi - 02-27-2017, 03:37 AM
RE: Thud. - by CRNDLSM - 02-27-2017, 03:48 AM
RE: Thud. - by Flos Campi - 02-27-2017, 04:55 AM
RE: Thud. - by muteyy - 02-27-2017, 06:21 AM
RE: Thud. - by Flos Campi - 02-27-2017, 11:56 AM
RE: Thud. - by Lizzie - 02-28-2017, 01:55 AM
RE: Thud. - by RiverNotch - 02-28-2017, 11:25 PM
RE: Thud. - by Flos Campi - 03-01-2017, 12:47 AM
RE: Thud. - by worros - 03-07-2017, 02:49 PM
RE: Thud. - by tommyb - 03-13-2017, 06:03 AM
RE: Thud. - by nibbed - 03-13-2017, 12:01 PM
RE: Thud. - by glennerdwilliams - 03-24-2017, 01:55 PM



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