Thud.

[RiverNotch]

Clean and smooth. Or maybe it's the Francis Bacon, stimulating my thoughts.

It's my developing style that wants me to decapitalize the first of each line -- in this case, however, the allcaps works, develops tension between lines, so that if you do go that route, i would also suggest decapitalizing basically everything. Also, the title's period really works -- but that leads to my one somewhat negative note, that otherwise the punctuation doesn't seem playful enough. The periods in the first and sixth lines seem utterly removeable, the first period clarifying what would be an interestingly constructed run-on, the second stopping something that would be more appropriately given breath by the parenthetic. But those notes are nits; really, a delight to read.