-zilla
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(02-25-2017, 04:21 AM)Lizzie Wrote:  You say you want to rebuild the cafes,
waterfront, parks, restaurants
exactly how you loved them.
Have you forgotten? You rampaged
through the city thrashing, insensate
like Mothra raging for her eggs,
only you had no such noble motive.

The sidewalks look like puzzles.
Freeways split like banana halves. .....beautiful 
The buses don't run, love,
but we can count change anyway.
We can trip over rubble,
ignore rubbish and debris, .......I'd prefer something more vivid here, like an example of debris rather than the generic noun
or sit on the subway and feign .........don't get this. An abandoned car, yes, but an abandoned underground train? Where do you find them? 
it's moving. We'll order the only food
on the corner store's menu:
deep fried rats and alley cats, ...... beautiful. American fast food at its best

make small talk
and pass the salt


Previously titled: "Pass The Salt"
Nice 'un
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe
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Messages In This Thread
-zilla - by Lizzie - 02-25-2017, 04:21 AM
RE: Pass The Salt - by Todd - 02-25-2017, 06:14 AM
RE: Rebuilding Rome - by Donald Q. - 02-25-2017, 06:34 AM
RE: Rebuilding Rome - by Achebe - 02-25-2017, 06:42 AM
RE: Rebuilding Rome - by Lizzie - 02-26-2017, 05:03 AM
RE: Rebuilding Rome - by Achebe - 02-26-2017, 06:25 AM
RE: Rebuilding Rome - by Lizzie - 02-27-2017, 05:02 PM
RE: Rebuilding Rome - by nibbed - 02-26-2017, 09:30 AM
RE: Rebuilding Rome - by Mark Cecil - 03-02-2017, 04:35 AM
RE: -zilla - by Lizzie - 03-02-2017, 05:31 AM



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