02-24-2017, 06:01 AM
Hi, Scribner 
Sounds like you have had a hopeful and blessed past year! Sometimes it's hard to dive in with the first poem. We want to spill it all out, our hearts, and what we feel. I am new, too. I haven't posted my first poem yet... I want to work on critiquing, it is actually a form of instruction to myself and though I am not that good, it may help others, I hope... Reading polished poems is helping me with my awkwardness of pen, too. It helps me to clean up my own work and start on clearer revisions. I am using my notepad found in my pigpenpoetry user CP. It is awesome, because I can update each revision by pushing the update button. It was important for me to remember to copy the original, as not to lose it. How cool to compare the original with the last revision! The poem I was going to post as my first has now been changed and revised so many times, I can't remember how many times, now. But it's still not ready. I figure going over it again and again, changing what makes it too long, omitting words that aren't as important, changing and switching things around, getting down the proper punctuation, familiarizing myself with the format codes, etc., are all helpful before I post my first poem. I know even with my own polishing there will me more to do. I hope sharing my experience is helpful.
I agree that the repetition should be cut and the poem should be shortened and given stanzas. Your brightness & enthusiasm is felt through your pen, I hope to read more of your poetry soon.
Best Wishes,
Nibbed
Sounds like you have had a hopeful and blessed past year! Sometimes it's hard to dive in with the first poem. We want to spill it all out, our hearts, and what we feel. I am new, too. I haven't posted my first poem yet... I want to work on critiquing, it is actually a form of instruction to myself and though I am not that good, it may help others, I hope... Reading polished poems is helping me with my awkwardness of pen, too. It helps me to clean up my own work and start on clearer revisions. I am using my notepad found in my pigpenpoetry user CP. It is awesome, because I can update each revision by pushing the update button. It was important for me to remember to copy the original, as not to lose it. How cool to compare the original with the last revision! The poem I was going to post as my first has now been changed and revised so many times, I can't remember how many times, now. But it's still not ready. I figure going over it again and again, changing what makes it too long, omitting words that aren't as important, changing and switching things around, getting down the proper punctuation, familiarizing myself with the format codes, etc., are all helpful before I post my first poem. I know even with my own polishing there will me more to do. I hope sharing my experience is helpful.
I agree that the repetition should be cut and the poem should be shortened and given stanzas. Your brightness & enthusiasm is felt through your pen, I hope to read more of your poetry soon.
Best Wishes,
Nibbed
there's always a better reason to love