02-24-2017, 04:58 AM
(03-15-2016, 08:30 PM)RiverNotch Wrote: THEOSISHello River. I dislike the double dashes in the middle more than anything else. So, picky, I know.
We are not devils -- we are gods,
once bathed -- washed of the clods
seed-stained -- taste of the love! I would choose one of the loves, having two back to back is not working for me.
Love your Holy Flesh -- from above! Phrasing is ambiguous. Is the loving accomplished from above or is the flesh coming down from above to be loved down here? Is it a command to love one's flesh that came from above? And who does 'your' refer to?
"the love" is vague, and "above" is too, but I can more easily divine the meaning of the second.

