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#11

02-18-2017, 10:26 AM

I agree with ella. Even though I'm not a big fan of 'paralyses' because of the metaphor, the original was still better than the later edits and dropping the last line alone should be enough

~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe

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caroline - by canofworms - 02-16-2017, 01:37 PM

RE: caroline - by Lizzie - 02-16-2017, 03:08 PM

RE: caroline - by Achebe - 02-16-2017, 05:20 PM

RE: caroline - by canofworms - 02-17-2017, 02:01 AM

RE: caroline - by Achebe - 02-17-2017, 05:25 AM

RE: caroline - by canofworms - 02-18-2017, 08:30 AM

RE: caroline - by ellajam - 02-16-2017, 11:36 PM

RE: caroline - by canofworms - 02-18-2017, 04:52 AM

RE: caroline - by amaril - 02-18-2017, 05:21 AM

RE: caroline - by ellajam - 02-18-2017, 08:37 AM

RE: caroline - by Achebe - 02-18-2017, 10:26 AM

RE: caroline - by ellajam - 02-18-2017, 12:24 PM

RE: caroline - by canofworms - 02-18-2017, 01:14 PM

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