02-18-2017, 08:37 AM
IMO your edits are too heavyhanded, I like this:
Maybe you could lose "how", but your poem, your choice.
Quote:Silkscreen of sweat on your shoulder
paralyzes me from across the room.
How I long to press my cheek there.
Maybe you could lose "how", but your poem, your choice.
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