A Round for Dublin
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(12-02-2016, 08:59 PM)RiverNotch Wrote:  A Round for Dublin


for when ancient cities were small
and most modern cities, "were" not cities at all, You could put this in where suggested
you were the smallest: a model I love the strong flow and connectedness in this first stanza

by which our country should grow
out of this putrid mess of snow
that is Pinatubo's discharge. Know I don't understand the connection to Pinatubo

that you're well and truly loved, e'en
by those who'd rather have seen
all those damn Nationalists hanged on a tree, I suppose this is now true of most English people who now love the Irish

at least with Ni Houlihan having proved
not only that she could win on the road
but also produce U2. Yea I think you could do a bit more to make this a stronger ending
Poetry is the unexpected utterance of the soul 

Mark Nepo
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Messages In This Thread
A Round for Dublin - by RiverNotch - 12-02-2016, 08:59 PM
RE: A Round for Dublin - by Lizzie - 02-11-2017, 10:30 AM
RE: A Round for Dublin - by RiverNotch - 02-11-2017, 02:13 PM
RE: A Round for Dublin - by Achebe - 02-11-2017, 03:28 PM
RE: A Round for Dublin - by Mark Cecil - 02-13-2017, 07:08 AM



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