02-13-2017, 07:08 AM
(12-02-2016, 08:59 PM)RiverNotch Wrote: A Round for Dublin
for when ancient cities were small
and most modern cities, "were" not cities at all, You could put this in where suggested
you were the smallest: a model I love the strong flow and connectedness in this first stanza
by which our country should grow
out of this putrid mess of snow
that is Pinatubo's discharge. Know I don't understand the connection to Pinatubo
that you're well and truly loved, e'en
by those who'd rather have seen
all those damn Nationalists hanged on a tree, I suppose this is now true of most English people who now love the Irish
at least with Ni Houlihan having proved
not only that she could win on the road
but also produce U2. Yea I think you could do a bit more to make this a stronger ending
Poetry is the unexpected utterance of the soul
Mark Nepo
Mark Nepo

