02-13-2017, 02:27 AM
Hi Duke! I like medically, I like forensically, but I don't think empirically works. Feeling the unseen is the opposite of empirical evidence.
Are you trying to say that the third stanza items are who we REALLY are as opposed to the first two, or just that those are other facets that are just as true? This might inform your word choice. I didn't like humanistic (mostly because I think of philosophy classes in uni), but it felt closer to being accurate.
The problem might just be in the structure. I'd recommend taking your concepts and doing a rewrite in another form, and see if another structure allows you to say what you're really wanting to. Sometimes we get boxed in by what we've already written.
Hope this helps,
Cheers!
Lizzie
Are you trying to say that the third stanza items are who we REALLY are as opposed to the first two, or just that those are other facets that are just as true? This might inform your word choice. I didn't like humanistic (mostly because I think of philosophy classes in uni), but it felt closer to being accurate.
The problem might just be in the structure. I'd recommend taking your concepts and doing a rewrite in another form, and see if another structure allows you to say what you're really wanting to. Sometimes we get boxed in by what we've already written.
Hope this helps,
Cheers!
Lizzie