02-11-2017, 11:06 AM
Hello. 
The core of this piece could be stated more compactly. I'd advocate paring it down and doing it as more of a short poem. Here's an example:
Sticky, grabbing, clinging --
what have your hands touched?
When were they last cleaned?
They're rubbing my face.
We share everything,
even your runny nose.
The core of this piece could be stated more compactly. I'd advocate paring it down and doing it as more of a short poem. Here's an example:Sticky, grabbing, clinging --
what have your hands touched?
When were they last cleaned?
They're rubbing my face.
We share everything,
even your runny nose.