02-06-2017, 08:59 PM
I like the contrast of the clear opening image vs the misty second half. In L3 "dreaming" might say the same thing as the full line as they are awake, so dream can equal wish.
(02-06-2017, 08:21 PM)Achebe Wrote: Children play
in the slanting light
of wish fulfilment dreams.
Perhaps going away
into the night
is not what it seems.
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