Precision - Edit2
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Really enjoy the pattern, learned something new in the spoiler


(02-05-2017, 02:14 AM)dukealien Wrote:  Precision


Piss in a bottle
shit in a jar
bleed in a vial
have your gut scanned ~
all to find out
medically
just how you are.

Answer the phone
say the word “yes” I appreciate the spoiler but this line seems out of place, maybe elaborate the evidence line by line like the first stanza, piss shit blood
leave fingerprints,
mucus, saliva,
semen or hair ~
then all will know
forensically
just who you are.

Call the heat warm
stare at the stars
envy the birds,
a baby, the dead;
see and believe
what you have read ~ cliche?
then you shall know
humanistically humanistically long awkward word
just what you are.

Written after the annual physical, and reading that criminal elements are now making calls whose sole purpose is to get the unwary mark to say the word "yes" so it can be spliced in after an unrelated phrase such as, "You agree to pay $500 a month for this service?"
Thanks for posting!
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Precision - Edit2 - by dukealien - 02-05-2017, 02:14 AM
RE: Precision - by CRNDLSM - 02-05-2017, 07:59 AM
RE: Precision - by QDeathstar - 02-08-2017, 12:59 PM
RE: Precision - by Caleb Murdock - 02-12-2017, 01:23 PM
RE: Precision - Edit - by dukealien - 02-12-2017, 11:12 PM
RE: Precision - Edit - by Lizzie - 02-13-2017, 02:27 AM
RE: Precision - Edit - by Caleb Murdock - 02-16-2017, 08:09 PM
RE: Precision - Edit - by ellajam - 02-16-2017, 09:47 PM
RE: Precision - Edit - by Caleb Murdock - 02-16-2017, 10:50 PM
RE: Precision - Edit - by CRNDLSM - 02-17-2017, 01:48 AM
RE: Precision - Edit2 - by dukealien - 02-22-2017, 11:56 PM



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