01-23-2017, 02:20 PM
*I think the solution to the problem I noted concerning the first stanza is to just remove lines six and seven. "blanched roe" and "fragile as stained glass" distract from the main point that the silica gel (which, again, is not poisonous -- but again, I don't really care if it isn't) lies so close to the weed, especially since at that point the sentence is still talking about the package, and not directly about the silica or the seaweed. And I did get that this was talking about a seaweed snack, although the earlier edits of my original post were probably inconsiderate of that -- anyway, I don't really care about them algal snacks, they're not as filling as, say, a proper bag of chips.