Who Am I?

[Myotis]

I play both roles.
   I am death and dark,
   I am life and light,
I enjoy the introduction. Setting the stage for the paradoxes within this poem. Signifying both good and evil in one entity. 

I burn, I build, I blind,
   I clarify, I am doubt,
   I burst with courage,
The first line solidifies the first stanzas good and evil theme burning yet building, or helping while still blinding. The second line i feel would be improved with "I am clarity, I am doubt". Just my two cents. Doesn't seem to impede the flow while still providing symmetry. The last line is a new piece of information which ties in to the underlying strength of this piece. 

I call you ugly, I kiss you goodnight,
 I lie to myself, I love myself,
   I bury myself, but I
   rise as well.
This part seems rather specific to the author. Like talking sh!t behind their back but tucking them in at night. The second line is another nice paradox , and begs the question "How can one love themselves if they are not honest with themselves?". Bury myself but rising as well , seems like a situation where you doing things for others without looking out for your self. Just another addition i might add would be "triumph" instead of rise and maybe "Triumph Overall". It seems more powerful. However don't change it if it inflicts the message. 
   I liked reading your poem. I could feel the tone of voice and almost the influence to the writing. Keep it up. 



A ten minute freewrite! Critiques, comments, improvements?