01-20-2017, 02:07 AM
Hi CRNDLSM! 
I like the first two stanzas of this piece. I like the flow and the rhythm. But, I feel like the last lines wrap things up too neatly, too easily. And it's too straightforward there at the end. A little more show and less tell?
Best to you!
I like the first two stanzas of this piece. I like the flow and the rhythm. But, I feel like the last lines wrap things up too neatly, too easily. And it's too straightforward there at the end. A little more show and less tell?
Best to you!