01-19-2017, 06:21 AM
Hi, Dale. Hopefully enough time has passed that I can express myself a little more clearly.
What I had in mind was the form of a letter to a friend or a conversation with a girlfriend from childhood. Starting out with initial conversation about, 'what are you doing now,' then moving on to lighter versions of 'remember when' and then getting into more meatier elements of 'this is what things were really like, don't you think?' then coming out of that with some grief or wistfulness.
That's the "structure" that I had in mind.
So, you mentioned the 'power drain' idea on "Church of the Cul de Sac" as well, which makes me wonder if the problems in both pieces are one and the same???
But, yes, rewrite it to your heart's content! I give it to you freely.
Again, thanks for taking the time. Appreciate it.
What I had in mind was the form of a letter to a friend or a conversation with a girlfriend from childhood. Starting out with initial conversation about, 'what are you doing now,' then moving on to lighter versions of 'remember when' and then getting into more meatier elements of 'this is what things were really like, don't you think?' then coming out of that with some grief or wistfulness.
That's the "structure" that I had in mind.
So, you mentioned the 'power drain' idea on "Church of the Cul de Sac" as well, which makes me wonder if the problems in both pieces are one and the same???
But, yes, rewrite it to your heart's content! I give it to you freely.
Again, thanks for taking the time. Appreciate it.