Inheritance - Edit

[dukealien]

dukealien,

I really like that your poem has something to say about god. Correct me if I'm wrong/if that's not what its about. The 33 is what sold it to me. Not to mention the title of your poem. I like the idea of inheritance in a religious context, and that inheritance not coming from Adam and Eve but instead from the big guy who's image we were (perhaps) made in. And I like that that likeness is not necessarily on the face of things and in the faces of us.

Good little nugget here. Thanks for the read.
Evan

Thanks for that valuable critique, and the read.  Won't say you're wrong since a poet doesn't get to say how readers will interpret a poem once it's out of the barn, but that is not exactly what I was thinking when I wrote it.  (see spoiler if desired)  The critiques of infelicities in the wording are valuable, but that's not to say being forced to see the whole thing in a different light is not!

A lot of my poetry is symbolic - I am, or was, a programmer after all - but in this particular case all I had in mind was a narrative implicitly criticizing both "recovered memory" hooha and Spockian permissive child-raising.  That's all - no symbols or significance in names or numbers (33 seemed a plausible age to start seeing shrinks and having at least one kid out of the oven).  "Ted" might be a vague reference to 1950s "Teddy Boys," that's about it.  So not wrong, except at reading my mind (g).