01-12-2017, 11:17 AM
I enjoyed this, taking from it what I did.
What I took from it?
How sudden comfort (in this case a relationship) can be destroyed in a second. One day it's matching wellies and happy walks, then suddenly some underlying discontent can end things, shocking for one of those involved. I've been on both sides of that situation, so it hit home.
Any more than that? I struggled to take anything further, as this suggests so much but gives so little. If that is deliberate and my above feeling is what is intended, then the poem is a short, sharp, fantastic success. If not, I feel you can make a stronger impression on your reader.
What I took from it?
How sudden comfort (in this case a relationship) can be destroyed in a second. One day it's matching wellies and happy walks, then suddenly some underlying discontent can end things, shocking for one of those involved. I've been on both sides of that situation, so it hit home.
Any more than that? I struggled to take anything further, as this suggests so much but gives so little. If that is deliberate and my above feeling is what is intended, then the poem is a short, sharp, fantastic success. If not, I feel you can make a stronger impression on your reader.
RBJ
Man differs more from Man, than Man from Beast~ Rochester
When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro~ HST
Man differs more from Man, than Man from Beast~ Rochester
When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro~ HST