01-10-2017, 03:21 AM
(12-08-2016, 07:43 AM)Sparkydashforth Wrote: He wore a duffel coatSparky, Nice beginning,,,
so did she
They looked cute
walking in Regents Park
that Autumn
in their matching green wellies
When he left her
he packed only pockets
bundled together
with toggles and loops
But you loose me in the 3rd stanza... why did he leave? were the pockets or his coat bundled together with toggles and loops? and why? the title must be more of a clue to the reader than a writer's whim. But overall I like the feel of this.