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Their Fabric is Thread-Bare
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01-05-2017, 03:07 PM
Hi. First piece of feedback on here so bare with me. I really enjoy the concept of your poem and the key message. I love metaphors in poetry. I think the 3rd and 4th line need to be reworked. This didn't feel like it flowed very well as I was reading through it. I would probably change the sunny breeze of life to gentle breeze of life. I hope this helps.
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Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by Coquette16 - 12-04-2016, 11:58 AM
RE: Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by steentwy - 12-04-2016, 05:10 PM
RE: Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by Quixilated - 12-07-2016, 11:33 AM
RE: Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by Missy - 12-08-2016, 06:16 AM
RE: Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by Mark Cecil - 12-10-2016, 06:52 AM
RE: Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by mv5543 - 12-10-2016, 01:18 PM
RE: Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by Coquette16 - 01-03-2017, 10:04 AM
RE: Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by HopeVictoria56 - 12-29-2016, 04:32 AM
RE: Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by It Howls from Below - 01-03-2017, 03:22 AM
RE: Their Fabric is Thread-Bare - by Hkrodgers - 01-05-2017, 03:07 PM
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