Counting to ten

[Mark Cecil]

I would go along with what has already been said. Some very good and strong and vivid imagery throughout I found the first two stanzas although fascinating the language that is used is a bit too unclear (e.g what do you mean by "Those damn camcorder tapes, noisily focusing on early modern medicine" in the poem). You should consider trying to make the work more clearer for the reader.

The third stanza I found I could understand a lot more and I quite like the imagery you created between the couple. I would keep this largely the same as it is.