Counting to ten

[UselessBlueprint]

I placed a moment out of reach, (lack of semantic sense makes this line unpleasant, but forgivable)
too young to explain the details
embroidered on its
white cotton sleeve.
Those damn camcorder tapes, (what about those damn tapes?)
noisily focusing on
early modern medicine.

I trusted it to mother (additional punctuation might be helpful here)
she carried it behind closed eyes,
curved reflections pushing
shapes from inside balloons. (I think of bubbles instead of balloons here, but that might just be me)
Pop (this line break feels cheap. Mildly effective, but it still seems cheap)
and the light that enters opened eyes
scatters into saucers,
settling like fish returning
to the deepest parts of the pool. (this and the three lines above are well executed.)
We lay there casting quiet
as the battle tent raged above us. (this and the above line are a mystery. I found that I had to ignore them to form a near-complete interpretation)

I touched translucent fingernails (I might consider a dash here, or something else to separate)
so small, so imperfectly real.
Inhaled your sweet and perfect pale
that deepened scent of skin revealed. (I can accept inversion, but was this one necessary?)
My breath spread incantations
that promised you our warmth.
The kiss I forged on your forehead (I originally didn't like "forged", but I think it works well with the weaving image as well)
would only let in dreams, tell stories
of the worlds we’d weave and all
the songs they’ll come to sing. (As wjames said, the ending is rather weak. I would definitely reexamine that)

Pardon me if it's too much input, I've scarcely been on and need to get back into the critiquing habit. I enjoyed this piece, and critiquing it was not entirely easy. You might benefit from a little more clarity, even if that means adding to this (whereas I might normally suggest people subtract the excess). The battle tent is just too confusing for me. See if you can make those two lines a little less mysterious. Aside from that, mostly some very good work.