Just a taste

[Coquette16]

sip of symphony
thirst undone
searing taste to
tepid trained tongue
palette muted
everything grey
transparent relief
opaque daze

Merrikay,
I love your imagery....the integration of artistic images, in particular. As I follow through the poem, I was conflicted with if the thirst being quenched was pleasing to the speaker, or simply mediocre...

The words "symphony" and "thirst undone" and "relief" are certainly more satisfying subjects than "searing", "muted", "grey", "transparent" and "opaque"...is this purposeful? If the idea is to tantalize the reader with a brief interlude of the first two lines and then digress to the last line, then the contrasting images are successful. 

Interesting that the poem begins with a symphony and ends in a daze...quite a unique twist, but for coherence, the theme should remain within the arts.

Nice little poem
-Coquette