01-02-2017, 11:42 PM
The imagery of the poem is not so much but I can feel an outpour of emotion from this poem, which is great.
I am a little worried with the informality of the words, I know it is supposed to follow modern writing but there is too much usage of slang in passages. It sounds very lyrical and in my humble opinion will make good lyrics to music rather than a style of poetry.
As commented you are very good with putting emotion across maybe if concentrate on the written prose it will make good poetry after all.
I am a little worried with the informality of the words, I know it is supposed to follow modern writing but there is too much usage of slang in passages. It sounds very lyrical and in my humble opinion will make good lyrics to music rather than a style of poetry.
As commented you are very good with putting emotion across maybe if concentrate on the written prose it will make good poetry after all.