I Wonder

[HopeVictoria56]

I really enjoy this poem.  It got me imagining a scene that I don't have any idea if it's what you intended.  I did pick up the smoking picture from the previous replies which is nice.  This person is smoking alone in a bathroom and is contemplating about another person.  When the thought of this person gets introduced, the pronouns switch from singular to plural.  There is an intimacy there because the smoke slips from the mouths of two people and is inhaled willingly or almost wantedly from both people.  The clothes come off as well.  It would seem to me the character in this poem has locked herself in a bathroom stall while she contemplates maybe why she yearns for it at all and what does it mean?

we
siege the forest.  This is the one thing I'm not personally enjoying is the nature that's presented because I'm seeing the bathroom scene and also the relationship that's playing out in the characters head. Neither of them for me are in a nature setting.  But of course I could be missing the mark totally.

as dawn approaches
waterfalls
and I
sit alone
inside
the empty
stall–  

my fingers
trail
like lead
and quake
like thunder
and us,
I wonder.  This stanza is great.  I can just see a zoomed in cigarette getting dragged and flicked in slow motion.

inhaling the black
that slips from our mouths
and we suck it back.

the nightingale
that sleeps
as we
split the
upper seams
of our shirts
as breathing hurts
and us,
still I wonder– I like one of the previous comments about ending on
"and us
still"

why I'm yearning the black
that slips from our mouths
and we suck it back

Great read. Thanks. Keep posting.