04-26-2010, 12:18 PM
(04-26-2010, 08:51 AM)Loveblind Wrote: The thoughts are bottled up togetheri like it. i think the title could do with a little more thought though.
Eagerly waiting to explode onto (onto at the beginning of the next line)
A blank sheet of paper
Tempted to create something
Masterful out of
My Imaginations,
Ideas,
And the help of
Similes, hyperbole's, or even metaphors (or metaphors)
If I could drown my thoughts in words
Drug my veins with it
Create rhymes in my head
That I will recite later on
(tell or show us what you would do )
Mentally ill
Whenever words
Are far from my mind
Because without words (no need for because)
I`m nothing
Without writing I’m lost
Writing is what I do (this line doesn't add anything really)
i think it needs to be a strong title.
i really enjoyed the last line. the emotion of not writing is visible.
i would have liked to see an image or two in there but still i enjoyed it.
thanks for the read LB.
