For Mae

[Achebe]

The wind rushes by
me like it's going to miss
its own wedding.
I'm dreading the next half
hour on the beach collecting shells. .....it's not clear to me why you're dreading it - is it because of the wind? You're not compelled to loiter on the beach. It sounds trivial, but it's one of those unnecessary bits of information that spoil the nice reminiscing in the poem

Brittany spears is thirty five! ....are we talking about the pop star? Isn't she 'Britney'? or is this an inside joke?
Holy hell.

We'd be sisters-in-law if I'd married Jared
and you married Seth like we planned. .....you'd, we'd, I thnk
I'll never forgive Seth—
he collects exes like baseball cards.
Remember how he whipped
that softball at you from second base
after you broke it off with him?
He broke your nose

and you dismissed .....a missing 'it'?
like it was your fault
for taking your eye off the ball
[was that before or after his arrest?]
The ball came at you with such force—
no one thinks you just missed—
he was the best player
on the team, and his aim never wavered. .....an interesting little anecdote.

You know what I miss?
Saved by the Bell and collecting
cards of New Kids on the Block.
I liked Jonathan, you liked Jordan— .....although I didn't grow up collecting their cards (in fact, I hated them), I get this. Very teen America, from what I know.
we said we'd be sisters. 

That wind needn't hurry so...  .....I get it that you're thinking about how fast time has passed and that leads to the next thought on how strong the wind is blowing, but it's a loose thought association that doesn't work for the reader

An enjoyable read. Thanks for posting.