12-17-2016, 08:11 AM
(12-16-2016, 07:24 AM)Wjames Wrote: I poisoned the daisies with ashes and butts -- Yaaaaaasssssss. Great line.![]()
while plumbing the annals of Playboys and sluts
I’d been with when I was alone. -- I can infer aloneness from the Playboys. How was the speaker with sluts when alone? Doesn't jibe.
I trampled the corpses and walked back inside -- I like corpses, but maybe make it different than the first line. What other beautiful things were trampled? Restating the previous stanza in a blander manner doesn't work.
to turn on the tv and placate my mind
with voices that were not my own.

