Lenses
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Hey I really like the message and tone of this poem.  I've just read the first edit and I can really relate to what your saying in the poem I like how you suggest you need a balance between positive and negative thinking and that it is sometimes important to be alone. I think the last line you could cut to: "They know when it's right to sometimes walk alone."  But its only a suggestion
Poetry is the unexpected utterance of the soul 

Mark Nepo
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Lenses - by mv5543 - 12-10-2016, 02:07 PM
RE: Lenses - by MindEraser - 12-11-2016, 11:24 PM
RE: Lenses - by mv5543 - 12-12-2016, 04:09 AM
RE: Lenses - by Merrikay - 12-14-2016, 03:06 AM
RE: Lenses - by Mark Cecil - 12-14-2016, 11:40 PM
RE: Lenses - by Coquette16 - 01-03-2017, 10:19 AM
RE: Lenses - by voodoochild - 01-17-2017, 08:58 AM
RE: Lenses - by j56 - 01-20-2017, 08:35 PM
RE: Lenses - by AsianPotato - 02-07-2017, 07:16 PM



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