I Wonder

[Wonderfullife]

Hi Missy , I liked you poem. Overall, it conjures up images and memories of forest walks, and the simple pleasures they bring.
I found some sections a bit mysterious, which is good, as poetry, I think, is supposed to get us thinking, and imagining.
I would have chosen a different title, maybe something like-Alone- or -Breathing- as the poem gives me a sense of being alone and also of breathing in clean forest air, while breathing out polluted city air, or cigarette smoke.
Enjoyed the poem.


I Wonder

we 
siege the forest.

as dawn approaches 
waterfalls...Good word play, conjures up imagery
and I
sit alone
inside
the empty
stall–

my fingers
trail 
like lead 
and quake
like thunder.....Liked the imagery of this simple sensory delight
and us,
I wonder.

inhaling the black
that slips from our mouths
and we suck it back.

the nightingale
that sleeps
as we
split the 
upper seams 
of our shirts 
as breathing hurts
and us, 
still I wonder–

why I'm yearning the black
that slips from our mouths
and we suck it back.....This is good, as it gets the reading wondering.