Engulfed
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(10-09-2016, 08:44 AM)kolemath Wrote:  naked air runs off .................................................................like how you begin with naked and dress the air.
 
                                                             More hurricanes this year
 
rain clouds drop water gowns..................................................very perceptive image
 
                                                             Too much rain
 
into the river mouth
 
                                                             drowned the crop
 
town slides off bedrock .......................................................................starkly over-the-top image - it works
 
                                                              They'll pay the higher price
 
old woman sails away on shingles...........................................................great visual
 
                                                             to make up the loss     
 
never found.............................................................................Yes. The loss never found is the greater loss.





 
The naked air ran off
as the rain clouds drop their water gowns, overflow the river mouth.

The nearby town carved into the land
slides off the bedrock and memory.
The old woman sails away on shingles,
never found, burying debris.

More hurricanes this year.
Too much rain
drowned the crop.

They'll pay the higher price
to make up the loss.

 
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Engulfed - by kolemath - 10-09-2016, 08:44 AM
RE: Engulfed - by Lizzie - 10-10-2016, 04:01 AM
RE: Engulfed - by Reflection - 10-10-2016, 06:00 AM
RE: Engulfed - by Brownlie - 10-10-2016, 01:17 PM
RE: Engulfed - by Alic Elliot - 10-10-2016, 01:28 PM
RE: Engulfed - by kolemath - 10-11-2016, 10:14 PM
RE: Engulfed - by kolemath - 10-16-2016, 12:59 AM
RE: Engulfed - by Sparkydashforth - 12-05-2016, 01:59 AM



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