Something Next
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(12-01-2016, 06:08 AM)Sparkydashforth Wrote:  Is there fresh roasted coffee?
Is there warm cake for breakfast?

Yes there is dark coffee, yes there is cake. I like where this is going

Did the small blue plate wash its face?
Does the buttery table
spread under the sun like a meadow? sounds like someone on their death bed making sure everything is settled before they die.

Yes, the twinkling plate and the salty table
are laid sunny side up.I like all the food references throughout

Are there rats in the walls?
Are there scurrying roaches?

No, that's your ear squeaking. I like that this is the only negative response, but it seems since the dead fish and kittens later are affirmative  that this one should match

Will there be work? Will there be words?
Will words hang in the air like china dolls?China dolls hang in the air?  creepy vibe makes me think this is death
Will their eyes be open?

Yes, there will be the happy and the sad,
and those that hang eyeless in-between.happy and sad doesn't seem to answer this question like the other responses, I don't know enough about China dolls?

Is there a dead fish under my pillow?
Is there a basket of kittens in the scullery? love the word scullery here

Yes, the hungry will dream of fish and dead kittens. I don't understand this answer though. seems like the squeaking in my own ear, something disgusting that's only in my head

Will there be something?

Yes, you may sleep or awaken,
while your body remembers what to do.
Yes, there will be something. seems like a nice comforting ending
Thanks for sharing, I'm gonna have some coffee and cake now
Peanut butter honey banana sandwiches
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Messages In This Thread
Something Next - by Sparkydashforth - 12-01-2016, 06:08 AM
RE: Something Next - by Brownlie - 12-02-2016, 01:09 AM
RE: Something Next - by Sparkydashforth - 12-02-2016, 02:39 AM
RE: Something Next - by CRNDLSM - 12-04-2016, 05:31 AM
RE: Something Next - by Sparkydashforth - 12-15-2016, 10:04 AM
RE: Something Next - by anonymousmouse - 12-15-2016, 06:21 AM



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