I Guess the Walls Look Warmer Now

[HaleINthewind]

I Guess the Walls Look Warmer Now

Empty boxes in the front yard
crafting shelves and a bed
inside of those stone brick walls
where I slowly forget those who kept me fed
and think only about who I met back then
dressed in black, woven silk Interesting the silk here as the above images speak of poverty but silk is a richer mans fabric.
fell for whispers, but never saw the distance I am lost on distance as well.
paint the walls with whatever comes to mind
tape the flowers to the wall, can't afford a vase
ashamed,
but you don't mind

When I excuse for the quiet
take a blanket and dye it
red or green or whatever you prefer I really like this from take to warmer.
to lie inside, 
to keep you warm, 
I guess red looks warmer
tongues fall apart
but you keep sitting at the table
that I crafted out of glass from the bottles that you emptied Strong image here. Maybe even the strongest. imo
pretend not to see the cracks and the shards beneath
nothing but fake smiles to disguise the despise in your eyes

When I excused for the nail that punctured my tongue
you replied: "There are words abound stuck in my lungs"
Stuck indeed, never relieved,
first a kitchen knife First? There may be something better. first seems out of place and confusing.
then quick stabs through your chest,
words form a flood or is it just blood? This is chilling like is this person finally letting things out of their chest or is the speaker murdering them and the speaker doesnt even know if speaker is stabbing somone. intense.
Deafening screams before you stop to breathe, I guess it was just words, bummer
gaping cuts, now your eyes stay shut,
mine never opened

Guten Tag der tomaten !

The title of this poem really caught my attention. Although after reading I am not sure why the walls are warmer I know the blanket is warmer. Is it from the blood? BLood would make walls warmer. Temporarily at least.  Your punctuation like a doughnut missing most its sprinkles. You have commas plopped about in some stanzas and then in your last stanza you finally have one question mark sentence ender. Should I be reading this as one long sentence until that point? If so I think that is cool and would work but the commas just seem to inconsistent to have purpose.

I really enjoyed this. You have a lot of good images here. The glass and crafting shelves into beds. My main suggestion is to go back over and work on the commmas and any punctuation if you decide to have any . Also if only using one end punctuation mark. Make sure it is at a transition point really highlighting something. Make it purposeful. Thanks for the read. I enjoyed it.

Chus!