October

[Achebe]

Wet roots run sideways into hills and clouds.  .... an extra syllable - perhaps a synonym for sideways?
The dead come and go
we see their smoke in the dank air. .... three lines. Theee sentences - too prosey

Tomorrow a child will crumble earth into stone,
the day after, a worm will unearth a chill dawn. ...I'd suggest to cut out the 'will'

A fine day to creep like lichen through a hollow bone, ... are you saying that it's a fine day for someone to do all that, or that a fine day will etc? The image is beautiful but I don't get the significance of 'a fine day'
or seep through a stem into Autumn.

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